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A Clever Companion (Part 1)A WhoLock Fan Fiction

The Doctor pushed his way through the milling crowds in Central London. He never should have come here. That note had to be delivered, but now he had places to go, things to do, galaxies to explore and—

"John!"

Not him. They were talking to someone else, had to be. There were plenty of men named "John" in London.

"John!" the muffled cry came again. Definitely him. The Doctor sighed. He wondered briefly if he should find another alias. After all, he had been going by 'John Smith' since even before Jamie suggested it—and that had been hundreds of years ago (just how many, the Doctor wasn't sure). If he could just ma
Growing UpSix-year-old calls from college.

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Date Night

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Table for two.

        Only one diner.
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For those of you unfamiliar with the form, this is a six word story, a type of flash fiction. (Visit #SixWordStories if you're curious!)

Feel free to share this, but please credit me. Also, I would appreciate if you would send me a link if you share this on a blog or a website like tumblr.

If you download of copy this, please :+fav: it as well!
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Critique by ~voiceless-song Jan 12, 2013, 6:11:40 PM
The very first impression on readers is the visual arrangement: a great balance created by brilliant indentation. This is supported by the placement of words, which makes the words' 'content' meaningfully implicitly symmetrical: table-diner; two-only.
The last (but definitely not least) delicious flavor is the story, or a number of stories, told behind it. The idea is not really new, but this condense style of story combined with the above-emtioned great visual effect all bring to it a dynamic beauty, and new shades of meaning.
The name, unfortunately, cannot keep up with the work itself. The word 'night' is redundant; its appearance narrows down the directions that the work may lead its readers.
This is, however, still a beautiful dine of words. For sad ones. For happy ones.
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~Meggie272 Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not generally too fond of six-word stories, but this is excellent. :rose:
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~SeaPlume Jan 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! I'm always pleased when I can interest someone in an art form they usually avoid! :)
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*astrangeallure Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, nice! :D Great emotional impact...it bites! :heart:
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*lombregrise Jan 14, 2013  Professional Writer
feat here / invité ici [link] :rose:
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~SeaPlume Jan 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! :D
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*lombregrise Jan 12, 2013  Professional Writer
cruel and clever :)
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